对于大部分考生而言，如果能够了解托福考官的“红线”到底在哪里，就相当于有了一个“避坑”指南，也能更好找准回答的方向。

其实在托福官方《OG》中，就有明确说明托福评分人在写作科目中最反感的行为！如果你的写作成绩一直不理想，不如看看自己是不是踩到了这些“雷区”...

01冗长累赘的首尾段

很多学生为了增加字数，会选择死记硬背或者是直接套用一些现成的句子，想方设法让评分人眼前一亮，但是实际上评分人非常不看好累赘的首尾段，比如：

The importance of the issue raised by the posed statement, namely creating a new holiday for people, cannot be underestimated, as it concerns the very fabric of society. As it stands, the issue of creating a new holiday raises profound implications for the future. However, although the subject matter in general cannot be dismissed lightheartedly, the perspective of the issue as presented by the statement raises certain qualms regarding practical application.

In conclusion, although I have to accept that it is imperative that something bedone about creating a new holiday for people and find the underlying thrust of the implied proposal utterly convincing, I cannot help but feel wary of taking such irrevocable steps and personally feel that a more measured approach would be more rewarding.

02一味堆砌词汇

和以上两段类似，除了冗长的首尾段，评分人也不喜欢堆砌大量词语并且没有针对论点展开论述：At the heart of any discussion regarding an issue pertaining to creating a new holiday, it has to be borne in mind that a delicate line has to be trod when dealing with such matters. The human resources involved in such matters cannot be guaranteed regardless of all the good intentions that may be lavished. While it is true that creat-ing a new holiday might be a viable and laudable remedy, it is transparently clear thatapplied wrongly such a course of action could be calamitous and compound the prob-lem rather than provide a solution.

仅使用大量单词叙述，即使作文写到300甚至400词，没有语法错误，但整个段落空洞，没有实质内容，在考官眼里只能得到1-2分（5分满分）

03结构不清晰

评分人会非常重视考生的文章结构，如果一篇作文结构严谨，读者就能毫无障碍地从头读到尾。

托福写作中要进行分段写作，所以运用有效过渡可以帮助读者跟上作者的思路。但仅仅使用“first”“second”这样的连接词并不能保证作文结构的严谨流畅，还要注意让所有的观点与文章的主题相关，紧扣中心思想。

Recently, there is a big debate on the issue that telling the truth or not is the mostimportant consideration in the relationship between people. For my experience, lthink telling a truth is the most important consideration in people's relationship. lnthe following,I will illustrate my opinion by two reasons.

First of all, honest make the trust stronger between friends or colleages. As weknow, if people tell a lie to others he will not be trusted, When he tell a truth, otherswill believe that he tells a lie. For example, a person who is honest to others, canget real help and get trust of others.

Secondly, telling a lie always makes things worse not only in work but also infamily life. When somebody do something wrong in his job he should annouce hismistake to his manager. lf he don't do that others may continue their jobs base onthe mistake. Consequently, the work will be worse and worse.

On the contrary, sometimes it is better to tell a lie to others, such as telling a lieto a patient. As we know, the sick become worse when a cancer patient know hisillness. A good way to protect their life is to tell a lie. So that many doctors will nottell the truth to a dying patient.

To sum up, people should tell the truth to maintain their relationship with otherpeople, although sometimes people have to tell a lie. People can get trust whenthey are honest to others.

这篇文章得到2分，虽然文章很长用了很多例子，但是每一个观点都是独立发展的，联系很薄弱，让读者在看文章的时候感到困惑。

换句话说，文章要有统一性。评分原则中提到了“统一性”、“渐进性”和“连贯性”，这些都是评估作文结构是否严谨、读者能否比较容易跟上作者思路的标准。

要得高分，条理清晰的衔接非常重要，建议大家可以多看一看范文，积累一些好用的过渡词。

04语言运用不和谐

语言运用也是重要的评分标准，想要得高分，作文中必须要体现语言运用的和谐流畅。作文的句子应该结构多样，用词应该贴切得体，符合词性和语境，并保持风格统一。

比如要表达“这名年轻女孩高挑苗条”，有的同学可能会写：This young girl is tall and skinny.

skinny这个词乍看之下确实挺“高大上”的，但用得不好，因为它一般用来形容人瘦得跟皮包骨头似的，是一个贬义词，而句子要表达的意思应该是褒义，这里正确的用词应该是slim/slender。

评分人还会评估句子结构的复杂程度以及考生所使用词汇的数量和复杂程度。使用非常简单的句子结构和非常基本的词汇，就不可能表达比较复杂的观点。

因此如果考生写出的作文语言难懂、句子简单、词汇量有限，那么无论观点多么令人印象深刻，得分也不会超过3分。

总体来说在独立写作方面，评分人很看重观点的质量以及陈述观点的有效性。会从考生如何展开观点、组织文章结构以及语言运用来评估考生作文质量，所以大家在写作时可以基于以上几点进行文章展开~